Image by Pero Zivkovic

the fog continues its stealth descent
with the lure to prolong my sleep
pages of discipline turn and burn

as the distant tides turn
I sleep and bleat like a comfortable sheep
the fog continues its stealth descent

drowsiness makes me blend
caution and comfort with
pages of discipline that turn and burn

so much to unlearn
thought they said rest was good, especially
when the fog begins its stealth descent

years of choosing comfort over what hurts
have piled up into a stagnant life torn out of
pages of discipline that turn and burn

i must awake and mend
what remains of a wasted night
as the fog continues its stealth descent
and pages of discipline turn and burn


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12 responses to “pages of discipline”

  1. I see a theme here of seeking meaning through rest, but knowing there’s still so much to do. About allowing rest without losing drive. Villanelle poems can be tricky and I think you nailed it.

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    1. Thank you so much ❤️ Bridgette ❤️🙏😊 I deeply appreciate your comments. Have a blessed day!

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  2. it’s a great poem Benjamin – like you I sometimes get so wrapped up in what I’m writing I forget what I’m supposed to include or the word count! 😊

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    1. Thank you❤️❤️😁😁🙏

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  3. Nice! I was waiting for the beverage to be revealed. To me it felt like a nice, hot cup of coffee.

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    1. Thank you🙏😊

      Honestly, I was was so focused on the structure I forgot about the theme 😁😁 Thanks for your comments 🙏❤️❤️

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  4. this is a very good poem that fits the style but not the theme. Am I missing something here, is the fog the representation of what you like to drink ?

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    1. Thank you for your comments. I was so focused on the poem structure and rhyme scheme that I totally forgot about the theme 😁😁

      Had fun all the same with the prompt, though I missed the theme…thanks for the reminder

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      1. Could always submit another that does fit the theme 😉

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  5. This has a good rhythm and tells its story well.

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    1. Thank you ❤️Kim❤️🙏😊

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